Glowie
Once
upon a time, there was a girl who lived with her step mother and two step
sisters in a big house, small town of forest. Her named Glowie. Glowie was a
beautiful girl than her two step sisters. Glowie had long brown hair. Her hair
was very long. When she was singing nice song, her hair will shine. Glowie was worked in a cafe as a singer when she was leaved.
Glowie's step mother and her step sisters were bad people. they made Glowie
suffered in her own house. Her step mother forced Glowie to do all the
house chores. Her step sisters weren't allowed Glowie to use her nice dresses
and doll up.
One day, royal envoy came to Glowie's house for announcing that the Kingdom
will hold a party for their Prince. All of girls in the town had to come to the
party. When Glowie heard that, she was very happy. But, her two step sisters
and her step mother baned her to go anywhere the night.
At the night, Glowie was cried because she wanted to go to the
party, but she couldn't. When Glowie was cried, a fairy came to her. Then, the
fairy made her became a beautiful girl with nice hair. the fairy told to Glowie
that she had to come back at midnight because the magic would lose after the
midnight. Glowie went to the party with beautiful blue dress. All people looked
at to her. After that, The Prince asked Glowie to dance together. When they
were dancing, they didn't realize the time was running to midnight. Glowie was
surprised and ran to come back to her house before her step mother and her step
sisters arrived. But,The Prince was hold Glowie's hair and got part of her hair.
On the next day, royal envoy came again to Glowie's house to find
who has the glow's hair. When Glowie was singing, her step mother blocked her
in room.So, the royal envoy didn't find the own of glow's hair. And they
leaved. In the noon, Glowie had a showed in a cafe and when she was singing, her hair was shining. The royal envoy that were being there, they looked at Glowie. Then
they approached Glowie and showed haircut of Glowie. The royal envoy found the
own of glow hair.
Finally, Glowie and The Prince were married. Glowie's step mother
and her step sisters were became a housekeeper and maid in Glowie's house. Glowie and
the Prince were lived happily ever after.
In the first line word "step mother" should be stepmother, "step sisters" should be stepsisters.
ReplyDeleteGlowie had long brown hair. Her hair was very long. It should be "Glowie had very long and brown hair.
Be careful with the using of capital letters and punctuation.
That's all from me.
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